Wednesday, September 16, 2009

Projects : Essay Feedback

I will give you a copy of this during tutorials, but the handout that we created together in class is available to download here. Meanwhile I just wanted to give you an example of how to use a mix of quotation and summaries in one pargaraph. I started by looking at some opinions on marriage which I found in the Oxford Dictionary of Quotations...

"A man is only as faithful as his opportunity." (Chris Rock)
"I don't think it's the nature of any man to be monogamous. Men are propelled by genetically ordained impulses over which they have no control to distribute their seed." (Marlon Brando)
"Bigamy is having one wife too many. Monogamy is the same." (Oscar Wilde)

I then wrote a paragraph to try to draw these ideas together...this is what I came up with:

Many men make excuses for being unfaithful, but some give detailed reasons. The actor Marlon Brando accounts for male infidelity with a scientific explanation. He argues that since men are genetically ordained to spread their seed, it is against nature for them to be monogamous. For Oscar Wilde, monogamy is “one wife too many” and therefore simply a waste of time, while Chris Rock questions whether faithfulness really exists at all among men. He claims that “a man is only as faithful as his opportunity”, meaning basically that if a man has the chance to cheat, he will.

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