TASK ONE:
Nineteen rings and three sets of earrings were dug up from a drain.
The drain was at a house.
The house is in a suburb.
The suburb is called Seine-Saint-Denis.
The suburb is a working-class area.
One of the pairs of earrings has a value of £14m.
All of this information comes from the police.
CREATE A COMPLEX SENTENCE (aim for 31 words)
TASK TWO:
Nine people were charged over the robbery.
The house belonged to a person.
The person was one of the robbers.
CREATE A COMPLEX SENTENCE (aim for 13 words)
TASK THREE:
The Harry Winston boutique is on a street
The street is off the Champs-Elysées Avenue
The Champs-Elysees Avenue is dotted with fashion houses.
The Champs-Elysees Avenue is dotted with cafes.
CREATE A COMPLEX SENTENCE (aim for 20 words)
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6 comments:
Eighteen rings and three sets of earrings, one of them valued at £14m, were dug up from a drain in a house located in the suburb of Seine-Saint-Denis inhabited by working-class, informed by the police.
The police informed that eighteen rings and three sets of earrings, one of them valued at £14m, were dug up from a drain in house located in the suburb of Seine-Saint-Denis inhabited by working-class.
Nine-people were charged over the robbery a house belonged to one of them.
The Harry Winston boutique is on a street off the Champs-Elysées Avenue which is dotted with fashion houses and cafes.
Good effort, but some comments on your sentences:
For TASK ONE, your use of "inform" is a problem. INFORM is transitive and so needs an object (e.g. the police informed us), but it really isn't necessary here. In academic writing, how do you normally show where information comes from? Otherwise, your sentence is good, with the exception of "suburb of Seine-Saint-Denis inhabited by working-class". To use "working class" in this way, you would need either THE WORKING CLASS or WORKING CLASS PEOPLE (although the former would be inappropriate). There's an easier, shorter way of incorporating this detail. Try positioning "working class" somewhere BEFORE the noun it modifies.
In TASK TWO you've written two sentences without punctuation! If you change the order in which you provide information, you'll find a solution.
Your sentence for TASK THREE is excellent, but does it need any punctuation?
The information that nineteen rings and £42m valued three sets of earrings were dug up from a drain of a house located in a working class suburb, Seine-Saint-Denis, comes from the police.
Nine people, including the house owner, were charged over the robbery.
The Harry Winston Boutique is on a street which is off the Champ Elysees Avenue dotted with fashion houses and cafes.
Shatha said
Task one:
The police informed us that Nineteen rings and three sets of earrings which is one of them valued £14m were dug up from a drain at house in Seine-Saint-Denis suburb which is for working class
Task two:
A house belonged to a person who is one of nine people charged over the the robbery.
Taskthree:
1-On the street off theChamps-Elysées Avenue which is dotted with fashion houses and cafes, there is Harry Winston boutique .
2-There is Harry Winston boutique On the street off theChamps-Elysées Avenue which is dotted with fashion houses and cafes
Canan: Very good sentences, but:
1. Try using ACCORDING TO in your first sentence.
2. "£42m valued three sets of earrings" should be "three sets of earring valued at £42m".
3. Your final sentence would benefit from a comma.
Shatha:
1. ACCORDING TO is enough to tell us where the information comes from.
2. "which is one of them" should be "one of which", but you'll need commas around this NON-DEFINING RELATIVE CLAUSE
3. It's "the house" rather than "a house" (which means just ANY house) and "a person who is one of nine people" is more simply expressed as "one of nine people". Can you see how / why this would be better?
4. I like your sentences about the location of Harry Winston's boutique but with this sentence structure it feels like it belongs in a story. Try using "boutique" as the subject of your sentence.
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